The Tibble Twins get circumcised Spork

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Many fanfics have a purpose. To have the author's favorite heroes get in new advetures, plot, even porn. And then there are things like this.

Sporking with me are my OCs Rick and Prokop.

Grandma Tibble: It is time to go to the Doctor to have you 2 Circumcised.
Tommy: Will it hurt?
Grandma Tibble: Yes it will.
Timmy: Well Bud had his done.
Grandma Tibble: That gave me the idea to have it done to you 2.

Pan: And this shows that the author is new here. First of all, never write two as "2" except in dates.

Second, paragraphs 2 and 3 aren't connected well.

Third, this plot is boring.

They got in the Car and headed to the Doctor's office. They went inside of it. And let them know they have arrived. They saw 3 other Boys there also to get Circumcised.

Pan: Too short sentences, and... tell me the author is German. Please. Because he capitalizes too many nouns. Then again, "circumcised" has no reason to be capitalized.

Tommy: Is it okay to be scared?
Grandma Tibble: Yes it is Tommy.
Tommy: Okay.
Timmy: Same here.
Grandma Tibble: You 2 will be fine. Look some other kids to play with.
Tommy: Okay.

Pan: COMMA!

Rick: The Dark Troopers have more emotion than this grandma.

They went over to play with them. And they introduced themselves.

Tommy: Hi i am Tommy.
Timmy: And i am Timmy.
Boy#1: Hi am am Henry.
Boy#2: I am Victor
Boy#3: And i am Eric.

Pan: Did the author just write "I" with cursive? English CAN'T be their first language.

Prokop: "Am am" sounds like a vehicle.

Rick: And they are all acting like machines.

Henry is a 5 year old Aardvark Victor is a 3 year old Moose and Eric is A 5 year White Rabbit. They played for a bit.

Pan: And we certainly need to see the kids being circumcised. I know it's sacred for the Jews, but still, not something that can interest even them.

Receptionist: Henry Andrews the Doctor will see you now. Take off all your clothes once you get in the Doctor's exam room.

He went in there and got naked. The Doctor came in and did the exam.

Prokop: I am glad for the lack of description.

Doctor: Lay down and i will strap you down and use this Scapel to Circumcise you with.
Henry: Okay. Can i watch as you remove my Foreskin?
Doctor: Sure if you don't mind pain and don't mind seeing blood?
Henry: Yes.

He watched as the Doctor did that.

Rick: Who enjoys seeing this done to a little kid?

Prokop: Captain Phasma.

Henry: That hurt. Can you preserve my foreskin in a vial?
Doctor: I sure will. I always send my patients foreskin in as vial to give them to remind them what they had on there boy parts once had.

Pan: This sentence is mangled, but unfortunately not incomprehensible.

Rick: What's the point of this?

Henry: Do you want me to put my clothes back on?
Doctor: No i have a hospital gown for you to wear. But before you put it on i have a shot to prevent that part from coming infected and you could die or that part will fall off.

Prokop: The First Order had better doctors than this.

He went home. Next it is Victor's turn.

Pan: That's all. In short, I wonder why such stories exist.